The charts below show changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one conutry between 1920 and 2019.

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The line charts depict the changes in ownership of house automatic machines and the total time spent doing housework from 1920 to 2019. It is clear from the graph that, the number of home devices increased and the percentage of the time decreased.

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what is shown, Refrigerators and vacuum cleaners climb from small numbers to sharp numbers addition to washing machines fluctuate. The two automatic appliances started from 0 to 30 in the first year proportion holds out

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stopped at 2000

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continue for 2 decades. The

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line begins from 40 and after that soars to 70

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fluctuates till 75. The

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thing the figure for the number of hours began from big ratio which is 50

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decreased to 10.

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, we could say that the percentage of households has rocketed over the years. Other than that, the hours figure drops through the century.

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The charts below show changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one conutry between 1920 and 2019.

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