These two charts show the ratio of online selling in New Zealand from 2003 to 2013
The two diagrams
illustrates
the retail Change the verb form
illustrate
portions
of online shopping sales in New Zealand between 2003 and 2013.
Overall
, there were four portions
in these pie charts, the portions
of travel and clothes decreased, the rest of the parts in film/ music and books increased.
The total percentage of film/ music and books proportions were
40% in 2003, both of them were around Correct subject-verb agreement
was
one fifth
of the chart, Add a hyphen
one-fifth
however
, the film/ music had a dramatically
increase to 33% in 2013.
Change the adverb
dramatic
This
situation lead
to Wrong verb form
led
total
of these two Add an article
a total
took
more than half of the chart in 2013, and the numbers for each of the Wrong verb form
taking
portions
were 33% and 22% respectively.
The travel and clothes used to take more than half of the chart in 2003, the ratios were 36% and 24% for each. In 2013, both of them had a slightly
decrease Change the word
slight
around
7%, Change preposition
of around
furthermore
, these diminish
constituted their combined ratio dropped to 45%.Wrong verb form
diminished
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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