These two charts show the ratio of online selling in New Zealand from 2003 to 2013

The two diagrams

illustrates

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the retail

portions

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of online shopping sales in New Zealand between 2003 and 2013.

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, there were four

portions

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in these pie charts, the

portions

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of travel and clothes decreased, the rest of the parts in film/ music and books increased. The total percentage of film/ music and books proportions

were

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was

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40% in 2003, both of them were around

one fifth

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of the chart,

however

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, the film/ music had a

dramatically

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increase to 33% in 2013.

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situation

lead

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total

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of these two

took

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taking

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more than half of the chart in 2013, and the numbers for each of the

portions

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were 33% and 22% respectively. The travel and clothes used to take more than half of the chart in 2003, the ratios were 36% and 24% for each. In 2013, both of them had a

slightly

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decrease

around

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of around

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7%,

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, these

diminish

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diminished

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constituted their combined ratio dropped to 45%.

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These two charts show the ratio of online selling in New Zealand from 2003 to 2013

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Experts say if the old people spend time and get along with others and excercise everyday will be healthier and happier .However many ealderly are suffering from lonelyness and lack of fitness. Discuss the cause and solution

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Nowadays, some employers think that formal academic qualifications are more important than life experience or personal qualities when they look for new employees. Why is it the case? Is it a positive or negative development?

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