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You live in an English speaking country and you want to do some voluntary, unpaid work in a developing country. Write a letter to a company called Cultural Expeditions, which organizes such trips. In your letter: •Explain why you want to do the voluntary work. • State what your skills and experience are. • Indicate where you would like to volunteer and for how long. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir / Madam You should write at least 150 words. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

#english #country #work #company #expeditions #trips #•explain #skills #volunteer #sir #madam #minutes
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to let you know about the recent posting I saw on
Cultural
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 Expeditions LinkedIn webpage, in regards to the senior nurse openings for the foreign voluntary work trips. It will be my honor
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 If I am given
this
 wonderful opportunity as I have always been in search to pay back to different communities and societies in numerous ways, especially the under-developed nations. Having seen
such
 an incident firsthand in my family, I want to prevent any additional cases in the world
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 deadly and long-lasting diseases like polio and blood cancer.
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 worked as a registered Senior nurse in California at a leading government hospital for over 15 years, with over 10 years
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 in specialized and urgent care,
while
 the remaining in general care and vaccination. I believe
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such
 hands-on experience, in the
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, will prove
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to be very valuable in giving back to the people and more importantly in educating them
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 involved in those bad
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healthy
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 eating habits. Given the opportunity, I would like to volunteer in any of the African
country
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, as they are the most underserved people in the matter of healthcare. I would like to start with a
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volunteership
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volunteers
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for
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,
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 and would be great if it happens to fall in the month of December as I have
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 Christmas vacation. Yours Sincerely, Thanks Harsh
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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