Some people believe that celebrities have a positive effect on society, while others think that their effect os harmful and negative. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Whilst opponents hold the view that some
infulencers
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influencers
have detrimental effects on the community, proponents have a diverse perspective. I am a staunch believer that other professions deserve money more than celebrities. On the one hand, some public figures,
such
as actors and singers have
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indespensible
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indispensable
role
on
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the community
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and have
positive
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effect on
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society.
In other words
, if icon stars donate to support the poor people, they will help the nation to have strong bonds among them.
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, Abo
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who is the most popular YouTuber on the YouTube platform
that he
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is like to help Arab people
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Syrians.
Thus
, what can be said is that
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of celebrities
deserve
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respect and money for their efforts.
On the other hand
, some individuals believe that celebrities do not merit the money. To illustrate, when some famous people publish bad qualities among citizens, it will destroy society.
This
can be exemplified by the famous Egyptian actor "Mohamed Ramdan," who spread bad qualities through his songs and movies through the YouTube platform and television.
Therefore
, some icon stars do not deserve massive funds for what they show. In Conclusion,
after
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essay has manifested the points mentioned above, it can be reiterated that some influencers inspire and admonish the youth from bad activities. I am convinced that teachers, doctors, and engineers have to
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by nations.
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