Some people argue that space exploration has had more to do with national pride than international effort. To what extent to you agree with this? How do you think space explonation will change in the future?

It is argued that
space
exploration is mostly related to how advanced a country is in terms of the
state of the art of
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technologies that they have. I personally agree with
this
notion because they want to attract other countries to see their new invention of technology. The reason why I agree with these issues is because as a nation, they
also
have a natural tendency to become widely known. As a matter of fact,
while
discovering
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space
they
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have
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main aim to expose each of their
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technology and even compete
among
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other countries. Take
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Russia
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and The United States
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example, explore
space
several times
during
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a year and exaggerate their reports in the media to seek people's attention and gain popularity.
Thus
, even if it takes a long period of time to prove and
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much money to support them, they still invest in
space
exploration to keep up their pride. Having said that, in the
future
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i
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believe that wealthy people will put their sight on
this
invention. It might be driven by
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sense of curiosity since humans have a natural tendency to go beyond their
limit
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.
For instance
, a well-known millionaire, Elon Musk sent his car into
space
and probably has other ideas for
further
exploration which could allow more people
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it as having leisure time on earth.
To conclude
, in order to boost their pride, developed countries mostly explore other spaces to boost their pride.
Therefore
it is undeniable that in the future it might be a common thing for them to travel to other horizons using the means of sophisticated transportation that they have.
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