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People now have the freedom to work and live anywhere in the world due to the development of communication technology and transportation. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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The public nowadays has the opportunity to live and work anywhere in the world, Because of better transportation and communication technology.
This
 brings many advantages
such
 as, they can earn more and can change their living standard. In my ,perspective the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. One of the major advantages, of
people
 having the freedom to work anywhere in the world is that they can earn better. Some
people
 might be in a place where they earn less despite having more experience and the amount of labour they put in.
Whereas
, in another part of the world they may be willing to pay more for
this
 amount of labour and experience.
Therefore
, they have the opportunity to travel to that region
due to
 the advancement of technology and transportation.
Furthermore
,
People
 have the opportunity to change their current living standards. Because in developing
countries
 the living standard is not that good compared to developed
countries
. Everyone wants to live better and eat better
that is
 the basic human right.
Therefore
, they move to the
countries
 that provide them with
this
 benefit.
For example
, a recent article in Daily Star showed that the majority of
people
 from developing
countries
such
 as Bangladesh, India, and Pakistan wants to move to Western
countries
 because their living standard is not good here.
To conclude
, As time passes the advancement of communication technology and transportation increases.
Thus
 giving
people
 the benefit to live and work where they find suitable.
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