The diagram shows rainwater is collected for the use of drinking water in an Australian town.
The diagram above illustrates the raindrop collection method for water consumption in a city in Australia.
It's clear that, before tap water can be consumed, it goes through several processes.
Moreover
, some pipes are required to purify it.
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, on rainy days, the drops that come from the sky are absorbed by drainage and distributed to a filter beneath the land surface. After through filtering process, H20 flow down to the storage bank in a deeper area. Linking Words
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, H2O still need to go to the treatment box, where the position is on the same level as the storage bank. Linking Words
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, in that box, some chemicals are sprayed into the box to make sure that H2O are in its best condition for a drink.
To finish, the water will be brought up to the housing through the pipes. Linking Words
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, it needs to be distributed to each house and people can consume it through the tap in their homes.Linking Words
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