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In some countries, companies allow people to work from home. In others, people are still expected to work in an office. Dicuss both views and give your own opinion

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Introduction
Nowadays
maximum
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most
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 companies
are allow
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are allowed
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 to
work
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form
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from
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 home after the
corona
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coronavirus
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pandenmic
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pandemic
. Many employees are taking the
benfits
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benefits
 of
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this
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these
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 facilities. But some
pople
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people
 are
stiling
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still
 searching
a
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for a
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job.
Body paragraph 1
In
this
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, I am going examine
this
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 question from both points of view and
then
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 give my opinion.
Body paragraph 2
On the one side,
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work
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working
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 from home a lots of
benfits
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benefits
to
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for
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 both
company
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the company
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 and
employees
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the employees
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.
Morever
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Moreover
, employees have a chance to spend time with family and save
own
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their own
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 time from
traffice
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traffic
 and other hurdles and companies save lots of
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cost
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costs
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such
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 as plant running
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cost
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costs
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, food
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cost
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costs
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 and electricity
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cost
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costs
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.
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, as per the report of BBC News, Google company save
the
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$100
billions
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of
cost
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 in 2022 through
work
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 form.
Body paragraph 4
On the other hand
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,
in
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at
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this
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 time automation is more famous in various fields.
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, people are
loosing
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own
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their own
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 jobs because it helps with 4 to
5 person
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5-person
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work
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 done by the single system easily and
no
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with no
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 need for extra manpower.
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, as per the survey
of
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by
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 Times of India, 10
lakhs
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person are
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people
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 lost
jobs
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their jobs
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 after
implemention
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implementing
 chat GPT in various sectors because of Chat GPT.
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, Jobs
demends
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demands
 are less than
perivous
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previous
pervious
perilous
 days.
Conclusion
In conclusion,
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work
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working
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 from is
good
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a good
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straightgies
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strategy
to reduced
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for reducing
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overheads
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overhead
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 of a company and I know automation is important for us but in my
opinion
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,opinion
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 it
is use
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is used
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 in that
work
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 so people are not
doining
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working
 and dangerous for them like as electricity and col mines. Chat GPT has
serveral benfits
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several benefits
, easily
do
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doing
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 the
diffcult
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difficult
 activity with
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a solution
the solution
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solution
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solutions
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. In my
opinion
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,opinion
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goverments
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governments
government
 suggest to companies only
limited
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a limited
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 purpose of
used
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using
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automtion
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automation
 in
specfific
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specific
 ara.

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