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The table shows Proportions of Pupils attending Four Secondary School Types between 2010 and 2020. Summarize the information by choosing and reporting the key features and make comparisons where relevant. Secondary School Attendance 2010 2015 2020 Specialist Schools 15% 18% 20% Grammar Schools 26% 21% 17% Voluntary-controlled Schools 56% 42% 24% Community Schools 15% 37% 62%

The table shows Proportions of Pupils attending Four Secondary School Types between 2010 and 2020. Summarize the information by choosing and reporting the key features and make comparisons where relevant. Secondary School Attendance 2010 2015 2020 Specialist Schools 15% 18% 20% Grammar Schools 26% 21% 17% Voluntary-controlled Schools 56% 42% 24% Community Schools 15% 37% 62%
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The table below illustrates information about the
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amount
 of people who register in different four
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secondary
schools
 from the period of 2010 until 2020.
According to
 the information provided, it shows
voluntary-controlled
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 start with
high
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 amount of students and it decreases gradually.
In contrast
, community school start with
low
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 amount of
student
 and increases significantly in 2020. Meanwhile,
specialists school
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specialist schools
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 were gradually increasing every year. If we look more closely, we can see that 56% of
student
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 voluntary-controlled in 2010.
However
, the number
decreases
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 to 24% in 2020.
In contrast
, 15% of
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students
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join
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 community
schools
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significantily
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the number
increases
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up
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to 62% in 2020. Meanwhile,
student
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students
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 who
apply
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 to specialist
schools
 were only 15% in 2010 and gradually
increase
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 to 20% in 2020. To summarize, most of the
student
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students
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were apply
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applied
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 to voluntary-controlled
school
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schools
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at
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 2010 but in 2020 community
schools
become
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 a trend above students.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words schools, student with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 3 times.
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