The table shows Proportions of Pupils attending Four Secondary School Types between 2010 and 2020. Summarize the information by choosing and reporting the key features and make comparisons where relevant. Secondary School Attendance 2010 2015 2020 Specialist Schools 15% 18% 20% Grammar Schools 26% 21% 17% Voluntary-controlled Schools 56% 42% 24% Community Schools 15% 37% 62%

The table shows Proportions of Pupils attending Four Secondary School Types between 2010 and 2020.

Summarize the information by choosing and reporting the key features and make comparisons where relevant.

Secondary School Attendance

 2010	 2015	 2020

Specialist Schools	15%	18%	20%

Grammar Schools	26%	21%	17%

Voluntary-controlled  Schools	56%	42%	24%

Community Schools	15%	37%	62%
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to specialist
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a trend above students.
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