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The table shows Proportions of Pupils attending Four Secondary School Types between 2010 and 2020. Summarize the information by choosing and reporting the key features and make comparisons where relevant. Secondary School Attendance 2010 2015 2020 Specialist Schools15%18%20% Grammar Schools26%21%17% Voluntary-controlled Schools56%42%24% Community Schools15%37%62%

The table shows Proportions of Pupils attending Four Secondary School Types between 2010 and 2020. Summarize the information by choosing and reporting the key features and make comparisons where relevant. Secondary School Attendance 2010 2015 2020 Specialist Schools15%18%20% Grammar Schools26%21%17% Voluntary-controlled Schools56%42%24% Community Schools15%37%62%
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The table below illustrates information about the
amont
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amount
 of people who register in different four
secondry
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secondary
schools
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 from the period of 2010 until 2020.
According to
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 the information provided, it shows
voluntary-controlled
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a voluntary-controlled
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 start with
high
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 amount of students and it decreases gradually.
In contrast
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, community school start with
low
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a low
the low
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 amount of
student
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 and increases significantly in 2020. Meanwhile,
specialists school
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specialist schools
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 were gradually increasing every year. If we look more closely, we can see that 56% of
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student
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students
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join
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joined
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 voluntary-controlled in 2010.
However
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, the number
decreases
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decreased
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 to 24% in 2020.
In contrast
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, 15% of
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student
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students
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join
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joined
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 community
schools
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 and
significantily
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the number
increases
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up
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apply
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to 62% in 2020. Meanwhile,
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student
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students
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 who
apply
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applied
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 to specialist
schools
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 were only 15% in 2010 and gradually
increase
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increased
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 to 20% in 2020. To summarize, most of the
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student
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students
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were apply
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applied
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 to voluntary-controlled
school
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schools
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at
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in
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 2010 but in 2020 community
schools
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become
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became
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 a trend above students.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words schools, student with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 3 times.
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