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The graph below shows the changes in production (millions) of three products in a garment factory from 1990 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the changes in production (millions) of three products in a garment factory from 1990 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The line chart illustrates the variation in
production
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 of three clothes in a garment factory from 1990 to 2010.
While
 suit and dress experienced fluctuation, the variation of coat shows
a
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an
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 upward trend throughout the survey
period
. The number in
production
 of
suit
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suits
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 experienced a
period
 of
high speed
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high-speed
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increasing
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increase
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 until 1995. The
production
 number reduced sharply from 27
millions
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million
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 in 1995 to 16
millions
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million
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 in 2005, attaining 18
millions
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million
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 in 2010.
In addition
, starting from 10
millions
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million
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,
while
experienced
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experiencing
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 a decline
period
 from 1995 to 2000, the
production
amout
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amount
 of dress climbed to 15
millions
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million
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 in 2010 and
is
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was
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 the least
prevalant
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prevalent
 cloth
at the end
 of the survey
period
.
In contrast
, the
production
 number of
coat
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coats
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 rose dramatically from 7
millions
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million
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 in 1990 to 27 in 2005.
However
, the increase speed has slowed down since 2005, reaching 25
millions
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million
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 in 2010, which is the most popular cloth among these three types in the end.
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