More and more people want to buy famous brands of clothes, car and other items. Why is this trend? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

In
this
contemporary world,
people
are more prone to bye expensive items
such
as clothes, houses, watches and vehicles.
However
, buying luxury items has positive and negative development. I think that negative development outweighs the positive development.
To begin
with, nowadays, there is a trend to buy luxury goods and
people
look for more unique things to put into their collections. It can be seen as a positive aspect, which is
people
are maintaining their social dignity by buying high-class items,
then
society knows how their level is.
For instance
, world-famous player, Cristiano has a
billion dollars
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car collection,
although
he does not use them and his followers may know he is a wealthy person.
Moreover
, a few
people
all over the world spend lots of
money
to purchase more comfortable rare clothes, cars and shoes to show their ability and seek first class in their community.
On the other hand
, spending unexpected dollars to buy things has some detrimental effects,
such
as
people
gathering them by spending more
money
so they try to maintain their personality without caring
necessities
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. They have a high probability of getting lost in the near future.
For example
, some businessmen were not successful after experiencing more profits because they wasted
money
to buy a luxury collection. Another point is if wealthy
people
dedicate extra
money
to charity
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, the suffering communities who come from deprived families will achieve comfortable lives.
For instance
, the billionaires in the UK help the poor society but asian countries' ministers who have rich economies buy expensive cars, rare animals,
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kinds of shoes and rebuild buildings uselessly.
Finally
, if
money
is delivered in the right ways, future society will be offered great benefits. In conclusion,
people
use their
money
whenever they want to buy anything
although
which are not cheap. Sometimes, others suspect more disadvantages than advantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Consumerism
  • Brand loyalty
  • Investment
  • Aspiration
  • Trendsetter
  • Affluent
  • Mimicry
  • Conformity
  • Identity
  • Self-esteem
  • Status
  • Perception
  • Advertise
  • Promote
  • Influence
  • Peer pressure
  • Societal expectations
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