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You booked a exam این athe centre, but you find it not suitable to you. So you should a letter to the centre and send your request about chenge it to other centre. You should write Why is not it suitable for you Suggest the other place to replace

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Introduction
Dear Sir/Madam
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My name is Mansoure Hojatiyan .Thank you for your attention to
this
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 matter.
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In fact , I booked my
exam
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in
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for
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 30 th of October in IDP
centre
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 Asia, but after
short
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a short
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 time I
relised
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realised
that is
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 so far from
the
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apply
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Taksim
square
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,
also
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 I cannot
fing
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find
 a suitable hotel for my accommodation
near by
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nearby
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 the
centre
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 .So , I decided to send a request to you if it is possible
replace
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to replace
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 my
exam
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centre
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to
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with
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 IDP
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centre
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Centre
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 Europe in Istambul.
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Proudly ,if you accept my request ,certainly it would be more comfortable
to
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for
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 me
,
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 because I will come to Istambul from Iran alone.
Beside
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, it would be grated to find
location
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the location
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 of
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centre
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the centre
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 easily and it would
be prevented
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prevent
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of
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apply
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late
in
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apply
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exam
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 time.
Finally
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 , considering my conditions about taking
a
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an
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exam
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 in
the
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a
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 foreign country alone.
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I look forward to your prompt response.
Body paragraph 5
Faithfully
Conclusion
Mansuore Hojatiyan

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that your introduction clearly states your purpose for writing the letter.
task achievement
Provide specific reasons why the current exam centre is not suitable for you.
task achievement
Suggest an alternative exam centre and provide reasons why it would be more suitable for you.
lexical resource
Use more formal language and academic vocabulary throughout the letter.
grammatical range accuracy
Check your grammar and sentence structure for errors.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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