The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of

 time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
The line graph provides information about statistics on owning electrical supplies,
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the second line graph depicts number of time spent doing housework in one country from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
, there has been a dramatic increase in the percentage of refrigerators,
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washing machines experienced a fluctuation.Over time, the
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of hours of housework per week decreased constantly. At the beginning of the period, rate of the washing machines illustrated a growth until 1960, after that, declined to 65% in 1980. Until 2019, they slightly rose to about 72%. Commencing with 0% in 1920, the proportion of refrigerators increased noticeably until 1980
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and reached a peak
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100%.
Then
, remained stable for almost 3 decades. In 1920, vacuum cleaners had 30%,
however
, grew to 100% in 2000, and proceeded with 100% until 2019. The amount of time spent on housework
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was 50% in 1920.
Then
, showed a decrease in the given period, and the final rate of hours was 10% in 2019.
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