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The diagram illustrates the number of shops in the situation of close and open in one country from 2011 to 2018.

The diagram illustrates the number of shops in the situation of close and open in one country from 2011 to 2018.
The line graph gives a distribution of the figures of shopping centres in their non-working
hours
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 and operating states in a particular nation over the
years
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 2011 to 2018.
Overall
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, it is immediately apparent that
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 the numbers for working
hours
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 were lower compared to non-working
hours
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at the end
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 of the observation.
To begin
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 with, the number of opened and closed
shops
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 in 2011 stood at 8,500 and nearly 6,500 respectively.
However
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, over the next 4
years
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, the number of non-operating
shops
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 saw fluctuations in
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 figures until there was a sharp decline to 500 in 2015. Meanwhile, the opened
shops
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 observed a dramatic fall to a little less than half
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of the original functioning
hours
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 in 2012. In the next 3
years
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, there was a steady rise to a little above 6,000 of the opened centres. 2015 to 2017 witnessed steady values for opened
shops
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 which plunged to 3,000 by 2018. Closed
shops
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on
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 the other hand, made a shape rise reaching a little over 5,000 and remained steady in the subsequent
years
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 until 2018.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, years, shops with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diagram
  • illustrates
  • number of shops
  • situation
  • close
  • open
  • country
  • 2011
  • 2018
  • overview
  • year-wise
  • comparison
  • trend analysis
  • increase
  • decrease
  • reasons
  • future prediction
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