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some people believe that money is one of the most important factors in a person's happiness. to what extend do you agree with this?

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money
 as we all know holds an important role in
people
's lives. But, speaking about
money
,
people
 believe that
money
 is
one
 of the most significant aspects of bringing
people
 joy.
This
 statement,
however
, is always contradictory.
this
 essay will discuss that
money
 after all is an important factor in
people
's delightment.
one
 important reason is that
money
 is always required for every small thing in humans' lives. when a mother raises a newborn, she has to purchase clothes and stuff for the baby. when a child
finally
 reaches school age, she through her parents is obtained to pay the school fee. what happens when the child is not able to go to school
while
 her friends are capable? she definitely will feel miserable. another reason is that when you have already lived a good life, you still have to have sufficient
money
 when you want to upgrade yourself.
for example
, a healthy body brings you happiness, and to be healthy, all you need is only eat good foods and exercise. you are able to do free exercise in public areas,
such
 as jogging, running, and walking. but, your body will feel better if you
also
 balance it by taking vitamins as your daily routine, and
money
 is the
one
 that pays you vitamins. another
one
 is, that you are supposed to look good when smiling,
then
 you could have brackets on your teeth. those will help you tidy up your teeth structure, and using bracket obviously demand
money
. I would conclude that
money
 helps
people
 to achieve their happiness.
however
, it is necessary for us to have correct knowledge in managing
money
.
thus
, we could spend
money
 wisely and it will not cause us to be dependent on it.
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