More and more people want to buy famous brands of clothes, car and other items. Why is this trend? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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trend is getting

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deserve their price is useless and

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will be discussed. Buying

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recent years. People tend to buy things that they don`t need or won`t need in the future. In my opinion, cause of

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a developed country. Because people are getting used to

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consuming rather than producing new

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of the nations. Societies

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fade away day by day eventually. In conclusion,

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trend to buy new

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of society needs to be ended nor they are unable to be developed to produce new technologies or any other innovations.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

222 words

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Consumerism
Brand loyalty
Investment
Aspiration
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Mimicry
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Identity
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Perception
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Influence
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More and more people want to buy famous brands of clothes, car and other items. Why is this trend? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

Fully explain your ideas

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Children find it difficult to concentrate or pay attention at school. what are the reasons?how can we solve this problem?

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