Nowadays, people are living an increasingly longer life and in many countries there are more old people than young people. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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of technology and knowledge,
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one of many reasons that allow
people
to have a longer life, because
people
can get the right treatment and get the information of health more easily. As the
reasult
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result
, in many countries, the number of old
people
are
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more than the number of young
people
. Having more old
people
than
yaoung
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young
people
in certain
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countries
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can have their own advantages and disadvantages, which will be discussed
further
as follows. There is a statement that
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that older
peole
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people
are a
lot
more
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mannered
that
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than
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young
people
nowadays.
Furthermore
, old
people
also
have been
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through
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many things and have
much
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experiences.
Country
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A country
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with a
lot
of old
people
will likely to have more embrace their culture and usually more
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. Take Japan
for example
, Japan
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known
for
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a
country
that
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more old
people
than young
people
, and Japanese
people
also
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are also
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known
for
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citizen
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that still stick to their culture. With so many old
people
in the area, it will boost the happiness of other old
people
.
Nevertheless
, the spirit of young
people
are
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more energetic than old
people
. When old
people
tend to feel tired easily, young
people
can work
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almost all day long.
Moreover
, young
people
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willingness and ability
also
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are also
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a
lot
more
that
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than
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old
people
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.
For instance
, young
people
can learn a
languange
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language
or even a program just for a short amount of time,
while
old
people
will struggle and even give up when learning something new, especially something that
related
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to technology. A
country
with a small number of young
peolpe
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people
will develop slower than a
country
with a
lot
of young
people
. In conclusion, having more old
people
than young
people
can have their own advantages and disadvantages. The advantages are that the
contry
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country
will likely more
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in culture, and tend to have more
happy
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happier
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environtment
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environment
. But the
disadvantages
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are the development of the area will grow
more
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slower because
of
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young
people
that
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can do
more hard
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harder
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job and can learn more easily are the minority.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

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  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

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  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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