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Nowadays, people are living an increasingly longer life and in many countries there are more old people than young people. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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 of technology and knowledge,
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 one of many reasons that allow
people
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 to have a longer life, because
people
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 can get the right treatment and get the information of health more easily. As the
reasult
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result
, in many countries, the number of old
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are
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 more than the number of young
people
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. Having more old
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 than
yaoung
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young
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 in certain
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country
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countries
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 can have their own advantages and disadvantages, which will be discussed
further
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 as follows. There is a statement that
tells
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 that older
peole
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people
 are a
lot
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 more
manered
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mannered
that
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than
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 young
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 nowadays.
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, old
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also
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 have been
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 many things and have
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 experiences.
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Country
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A country
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 with a
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 of old
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 will likely to have more embrace their culture and usually more
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. Take Japan
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, Japan
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 known
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 a
country
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 that
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 more old
people
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 than young
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, and Japanese
people
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also
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citizen
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 that still stick to their culture. With so many old
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 in the area, it will boost the happiness of other old
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.
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, the spirit of young
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are
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 more energetic than old
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. When old
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 tend to feel tired easily, young
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 can work
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almost all day long.
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, young
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people
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 willingness and ability
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also
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 a
lot
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 more
that
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 old
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people
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.
For instance
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, young
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 can learn a
languange
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language
 or even a program just for a short amount of time,
while
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 old
people
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 will struggle and even give up when learning something new, especially something that
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 to technology. A
country
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 with a small number of young
peolpe
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people
 will develop slower than a
country
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 with a
lot
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 of young
people
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. In conclusion, having more old
people
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 than young
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 can have their own advantages and disadvantages. The advantages are that the
contry
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country
 will likely more
warm
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 in culture, and tend to have more
happy
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happier
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environtment
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environment
. But the
disadvantages
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 are the development of the area will grow
more
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slower because
of
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young
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that
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 can do
more hard
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 job and can learn more easily are the minority.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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