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Travelers and business people often come into contact other cultures briefly. What are the main advantages of doing so?

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Tne
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 widely discussed topics nowadays
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are
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 friendship with
forein
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foreign
people
 and
introduction
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the introduction
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 of their culture.
Since
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the
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apply
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thousand
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thousands
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 of
years
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 local humans have
a
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had a
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such
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apply
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huge interest
to beyond
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in
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 the country and
learn
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learning
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 their language,
culture
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and culture
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 to communicate and deal with them.
Therefore
, today
people
 usually travelers and
businessmens
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businessmen
businesses
also
 sometimes briefly
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 their history to their purpose.
Then
 what is the main advantage
from
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of
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this
.
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 One of the main
advantage
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advantages
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 of
aware
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being aware
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their
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of their
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 culture is worldwide manifest. When you need a particular thing that you can't
main
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maintain
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 in your own area, you can deal with another delegate.
Furthermore
, being in touch with them
give
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gives
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 you a regard that will help you in your unknown future aim. Not only
businessmens
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businessmen
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 enjoy
from
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apply
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this
,
even travelers and
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but even travelers and people can also
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people
 can bring benefits.
For instance
,
knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
bits of knowledge
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, traditional foods and activities.
Were
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There were
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 occasions when
human
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humans
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jump their
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jumped
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 obstacles with rescue from foreign
people
.
For
example
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 Albert Einshtein the association of IQ was
closely
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close
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khow
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with
another
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other
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 scientists from other countries like Tesla,
Om
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and Om
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. They
help
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helped
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 him and were happy when he opened a new science theory. In
conclusion
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 I agree that
people
 need aware
their
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of their
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 history purely
yourself
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themselves
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 or even when
travel
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travelling
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 to their country.
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