Some people think that Zoo's are all cruel and should be closed down. Others, however believe that zoo can be useful in protecting wild animals. discuss both views and give your opinion.

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people have

diffirent

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different

views about whether

zoo

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zoos

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are extremely important or useless.some people strongly believe that

above

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the above

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types

of settings are so

crusial

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crucial

however

others totally believe that

place

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places

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where

animals

live

this

places are useless and very harmful to living

animals

. Nowadays,many inhabitants create new

zoos

for earning money and viewers visit these kinds of

preceding

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places and give money for it and

also

,they give food and beverages to

animals

moreover

they take

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with

animals

.On the other side of the coin,

this

situation

give

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much more

badly

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affects

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further

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they lose

capacity

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the capacity

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of hunting

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what is more,they do not want make

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a relationship

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with other male or

femele

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female

animals

this

situation

cause

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of decreasing rate of creatures that are living

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the earth.

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,if individuals establish various

types

zoos

for

animals

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will be extremely good

place

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places

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for living

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apply

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animals

Secondly

,we can save extraordinary

animals

via

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creating new places

which is

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that

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relates

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to living

animals

Additionally

,they always eat fresh and herbs foods

as a result

it gives much more energy for growing to

animals

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Thera

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are several opinions about

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question ,

for instance

this

situation

give

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much more income for both sides

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people and

animals

To sum up

zoos

are important

setting

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settings

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for all

types

animals

however

others completely believe that

zoos

are unnecessary

place

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places

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and very awful for

animals

.Arguably,l strongly believe that we ought to establish new

types

of setting

where

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is related to

living

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the living

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place

animals

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Task Response: The essay provides some arguments for both sides of the topic, but the structure and development of ideas are lacking.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

Paragraph 1 - Introduction

Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
4
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
31
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

242 words

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Some people think that Zoo's are all cruel and should be closed down. Others, however believe that zoo can be useful in protecting wild animals. discuss both views and give your opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

It is important for all towns and cities to have large public outdoor places like squares and parks. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Demand for food is increasing worldwide. What are the causes of this topic? What measures can the international community take to meet this demand?

You recently went on holiday and your friend lent you a travel guidebook. Write a letter to friend. In your letter: - tell your friend about the holiday - explain how the guidebook was helpful - say when and how you will return the guidebook

A long-distance flight consumes as much fuel as a car consumes in several years time, and causes the same amount of pollution as cars. So some people think we should abandon none essential flights and it is more efficient than restricting the car. To what extent do you agree or dis agree?