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The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The rendered map depicts the structural changes in the museum from 1998 to 2008. After analyzing the data it can be clearly seen that
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 the garden
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 had been reduced and cafe sitting
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 and fountains were built .
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,the restaurants were established in West-side
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 which was not present in 1998.
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 , toilets were
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 relocated in 2008 from the east-south part of the museum to the east part of the cafe.The location of the temporary exhibition room was
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 changed to adjacent to the garden in 2008.
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, the
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 of bags-coats and shoes was shifted from the lower right corner to the lower left corner of the museum.
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, the permanent exhibition room and ticket
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 remained the same in 1998 and in 3008 respectively.
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, the site has witnessed numerous changes and developments throughout the given period of time.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, whereas".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rectangular shape
  • central garden area
  • symmetrically arranged
  • expanded galleries
  • visitor flow management
  • temporary exhibition space
  • permanent gallery
  • visitor facilities
  • customer service focus
  • dedicated children's area
  • expanded restroom facilities
  • museum gardens
  • unoccupied outdoor space
  • shift towards long-term exhibits
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