Modern children are suffering from diseases that were once considered only meant for adults. Obesity is a major disease prevalent among children. What are its causes, and what solutions can be offered?
At
this
time, children
are suffering from diseases that used to be adult’s
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adult
illness
. One of the most Fix the agreement mistake
illnesses
diseases
is Correct word choice
common diseases
obesity
that
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which
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affects
children
. In this
essay, I will explain more about the causes and the solutions about
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to
this
problem.
Firstly
, children
are
like to eat more Unnecessary verb
apply
ultra processed
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ultra-processed
foods
. It includes junk food that have
been growing in recent years and Change the verb form
has
easy
to find. Most Add a missing verb
is easy
children
like to consume ultra processed
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ultra-processed
foods
because of its
taste and simplicity. The lack of knowledge about Correct pronoun usage
their
this
effect on health
issues also
make
them Change the verb form
makes
to
consume it daily. Change the verb form
apply
Moreover
, this
condition causes an unhealthy lifestyle and affect
their Correct subject-verb agreement
affects
health
into
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to
obesity
. For instance
, a survey by World Health
Organization shows that 65% people
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obesity
are caused by the consumption of ultra processed
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ultra-processed
foods
.
However
, there are several solutions we can adopt to prevent obesity
in children
. First of all, parents should make rules about what their child consume such
as limitation
to Correct article usage
the limitation
eat
junk food or other Wrong verb form
eating
ultra processed
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ultra-processed
foods
. Parents can also
educate their children
to eat healthy food and make this
as
habit Correct your spelling
a
to
their daily Change preposition
in
life
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lives
hence
it can lead to healthy
lifestyle. Add an article
a healthy
Furthermore
, by
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with
the
support from parents, Correct article usage
apply
children
will be happier
In conclusion, health
problem
especially Fix the agreement mistake
problems
obesity
has
a big impact Wrong verb form
have had
in
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on
children
’s life
recently Fix the agreement mistake
lives
or
even in the future. It’s not only affect Correct word choice
and
health
issues but also
other aspects in
life. Change preposition
of
Nevertheless
, if people can take action to prevent this
problem, they still have chance
to reduce Correct article usage
a chance
the
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apply
obesity
among children
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