Modern children are suffering from diseases that were once considered only meant for adults. Obesity is a major disease prevalent among children. What are its causes, and what solutions can be offered?

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are suffering from diseases that used to be

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obesity

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like to eat more

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. It includes junk food that

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been growing in recent years and

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to find. Most

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like to consume

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taste and simplicity. The lack of knowledge about

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effect on

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issues

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them

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consume it daily.

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condition causes an unhealthy lifestyle and

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are caused by the consumption of

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, there are several solutions we can adopt to prevent

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children

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. First of all, parents should make rules about what their child consume

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eat

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junk food or other

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. Parents can

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educate their

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to eat healthy food and make

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habit

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their daily

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it can lead to

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lifestyle.

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support from parents,

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will be happier In conclusion,

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especially

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a big impact

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even in the future. It’s not only affect

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issues but

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other aspects

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life.

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, if people can take action to prevent

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problem, they still have

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to reduce

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among

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

256 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Obesity
Sedentary lifestyle
Prevalent
Genetic predisposition
Comfort eating
Screen time
Physical education
Nutritional education
Economic disparities
Food deserts
Subsidize
Advertising
Weight management
Junk food
Healthy food options
Physical activity
Body image
Counseling
Consumer education

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Modern children are suffering from diseases that were once considered only meant for adults. Obesity is a major disease prevalent among children. What are its causes, and what solutions can be offered?

Your opinion

Some poeple claim that it is unfair to have same age limit in every work.Do you agree or disagree?

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreighn language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays more and more older people who need employment have to compete with younger people for the same jobs. What problems does this cause? What are the solutions?