Modern children are suffering from diseases that were once considered only meant for adults. Obesity is a major disease prevalent among children. What are its causes, and what solutions can be offered?

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are suffering from diseases that used to be
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illness
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. One of the most
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is
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children
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. In
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problem.
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,
children
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like to eat more
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foods
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. It includes junk food that
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been growing in recent years and
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to find. Most
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like to consume
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foods
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because of
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taste and simplicity. The lack of knowledge about
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effect on
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issues
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them
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consume it daily.
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,
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condition causes an unhealthy lifestyle and
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their
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obesity
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, a survey by World
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Organization shows that 65%
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of people
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with
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are caused by the consumption of
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foods
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.
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, there are several solutions we can adopt to prevent
obesity
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in
children
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. First of all, parents should make rules about what their child consume
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limitation
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eat
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eating
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junk food or other
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foods
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. Parents can
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educate their
children
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to eat healthy food and make
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habit
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their daily
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it can lead to
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lifestyle.
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support from parents,
children
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will be happier In conclusion,
health
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problem
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especially
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a big impact
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children
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’s
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recently
or
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even in the future. It’s not only affect
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issues but
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other aspects
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life.
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, if people can take action to prevent
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to reduce
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obesity
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among
children
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Obesity
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Prevalent
  • Genetic predisposition
  • Comfort eating
  • Screen time
  • Physical education
  • Nutritional education
  • Economic disparities
  • Food deserts
  • Subsidize
  • Advertising
  • Weight management
  • Junk food
  • Healthy food options
  • Physical activity
  • Body image
  • Counseling
  • Consumer education
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