The pie chart below shows the number of native speakers of different languages in canada in 1996, 2006 and 2016.

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the number of speakers of 4 languages at

Baskersfield

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Bakersfield

Senior College in 1980 and 1990.

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, English has become the most used language than the others,

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Urdu has chased it, but still cannot compete with it

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, in 1980, other languages

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rarely

to use

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, which

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people in that place only

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English to have some conversations with each other.

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, in 1990, English is still the majority of those 3 languages in that college even though it is decreased .

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Urdu's

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Urdu is

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also

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still in number 2 but slowly it is increasing

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time. Unlike Chinese and

other

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others

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that have a little bit of changes.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

112 words

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The pie chart below shows the number of native speakers of different languages in canada in 1996, 2006 and 2016.

An increasing number of larger shopping areas, malls and department stores are leading to the decline of smaller corner shops. what are the advantages and disadvantages of shopping in larger shopping centers rather than smaller, more traditional shops?

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