The pie chart below shows the number of native speakers of different languages in canada in 1996, 2006 and 2016.

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the number of speakers of 4 languages at

Baskersfield

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Bakersfield

Senior College in 1980 and 1990.

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, English has become the most used language than the others,

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Urdu has chased it, but still cannot compete with it

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, in 1980, other languages

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people in that place only

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English to have some conversations with each other.

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, in 1990, English is still the majority of those 3 languages in that college even though it is decreased .

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Urdu's

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also

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still in number 2 but slowly it is increasing

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time. Unlike Chinese and

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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112 words

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The pie chart below shows the number of native speakers of different languages in canada in 1996, 2006 and 2016.

Many people now undertake extreme activities, from hang-gliding to mountain climbing. Why do people risk their lives in this way, and do you think this is a good trend?

Some parents encourage their children to be competitive, for example in sports and classes at school. Other parents think that encouraging competition can be harmful to their children.

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