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some people think thay it is a good idea to socialise with work colleaguess during evening and weekends, eother people think it is important to keep working life compeletly seprate from social life. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #thay #idea #socialise #work #colleaguess #weekends #eother #life #seprate
It is generally believed that we should build a wall between personal life and
work
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workplace
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place
 , In my view
this
 idea is rather absurd as the best friendship advent from
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the office
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office
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besides
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 our job is our
sceond
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second
 family.
To begin
 with , we have to get along well with our
colleguess
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colleagues
 because we
spent
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 most of our day in
work
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the workplace
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place
 , around 9 hours at least!! so we have 2 options be social or be strict and isolated ,
psychologist
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 says it is better that often joke around during your
work
 time ,
this
 action
make
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fun
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the fun
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 situation and
get
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 you
ride
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 from
tenssion
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tension
.
Moreover
 , nowadays people do not have enough time to make a
frienship
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friendship
 at the cafe. these days people are really tied-up and they have a hectic lifestyle , they become early
bird
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birds
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 actually they get up early in the morning go to
company
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the company
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 and
spent
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 many hours in
terrafic
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traffic
terrific
 jam
thus
 they just see their
teamate
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teammate
 their wife without any free time so it is advisable to find
loyal
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a loyal
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 friend in your
work
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workplace
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place
 and sometimes hang out with them to prevent from
deppression
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depression
.
However
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 it
can noy
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cannot
 be denied that if a person falls in love
in
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apply
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with someone who works in the same
place
, both of them would be
fire
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fired
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 because managers are
relluctant
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reluctant
 to their staff
have
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having
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 a
lovly
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lovely
loving
 relationships they think it has a devasting impact on their focus or they just talk or send message to each other during their
work
 times
therefor
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therefore
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 it is better to hide your girlfriend from your boss. By way of conclusion, it appears to me that if you spend a
couple
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ofcouple
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 hours after 5:00 pm with your
colleaguess
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colleagues
 in the bar , your company is going to be
more
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a more
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 comfortable
place
 and it
lead
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leads
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 to
hav
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have
a great deal of
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a lot of
many
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 merits
in fact
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, in fact,
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i
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I
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 do recommend other people to have fun with their
teamate
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teammate
teammates
 at the weekends.
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