The charts below show the main methods of transportation for people of one university for work or study in 2004 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting the main features and comparisons where relevant.

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to us the main ways of transportation for humans of one university for their job or study between 2004 and 2009.

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the

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all

transports percentage

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transport percentages

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except

car

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cars

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were

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increased even a bit. As you can see the most noticeable changes have

car

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cars

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and

bus

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buses

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. In 2009 people drivers decreased

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much as half,

meanwhile

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men or women

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travel by bus almost increased

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of their first percentage. As

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car users decreased as other transport users increased.

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bycicle

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bicycle

riders almost doubled in

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5 years. Or just walking and

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also

rose two and one

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respectively. Getting back to all

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we can deduce that at least people living healthy life

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percentage of

bycicle

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bicycle

and walking.

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