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The graph below shows information about the use of public transport in one coutry, by age group and location of residence, in 2016.

The graph below shows information about the use of public transport in one coutry, by age group and location of residence, in 2016.
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The provided line graph illustrates data about the use of public
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 country, by age and site of citizens, in 2016.
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, in large
cities
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, the vast majority of
middle aged
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people
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public
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,
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other places, the biggest number of
people
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public
transport
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 was accounted for by the youth.
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, the big
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' residents went by
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public vehicles more than the small
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' residents.
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 the slope of large
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, the percentage of adolescents accounted for 40
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. At the same time half of
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people
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the people
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 from 16 to 30 old
traveled
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 by public
transport
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, the individuals from 31 to 45 used
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public
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 with the highest portion among all age groups (just above 65%).
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44% of all
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people
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 used public
transport
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. Only 10% of the oldest group of
people
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 travelled by public
transport
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Vocabulary: Replace the words transport, cities, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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