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The chart below shows gives information about Southland’s main exports in 2000,*20.., and future projections for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows gives information about Southland’s main exports in 2000,*20.., and future projections for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the primary exports of
southland
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the southland
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, namely international tourism,
dairy
products
 and meat
products
 in the year 2000, 2023 and future
projection
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projections
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 for 2025.
Overall
, international tourism and
dairy
products
 will experience an upward trend,
while
 meat
products
 will have
downward
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a downward
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 trend in the given three years. The income of
dairy
products
 will have some fluctuations. In 2000, International tourism had around 7.5 billion
income
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in income
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 from trading, which is
highest
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the highest
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 among all other sections. Now it
had grew
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has grown
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 by making revenue of 9 billion and it is predicted that
the
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apply
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this
 sector will reach 10
billions
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billion
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 by the year 2025.
In contrast
, meat
products
 showed a gradual decrease to 5.5
billions
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billion
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 in 2023 from 6
billions
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billion
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,
as a
result
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,result
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 it is said it will hit the lowest point of about 5
billions
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billion
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 in 2025.
In
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At
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 the beginning of the period,
dairy
products
 had a revenue of approximately 7 billion and it had a sharp growth in its profit(10
billions
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billion
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).
Moreover
,
according to
 the predictions, there can be a decline in the income of around 0.4
percent
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per cent
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 by making
the
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apply
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revenue of around 9.6
billions
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billion
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 by the end of the period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dairy, products, billions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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