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The only way to improve safety of our roads is to give much stricter punishments on driving offences. To what extent do you agree with this idea? Answer

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The graphs below give information on the predicted volume of
production
 by sector in the near future.
Overall
, they show that services and
energy
 will make up almost 3/4 of the
production
 in both cases and will maintain high stability despite some fluctuation in minor
production
 sources. The first chart provides information for
year
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 2040. It is illustrated that services (40%) and
energy
 (31%) are the highest sources of
production
,
while
 Info-Com Tech stands at 15%, and agriculture, manufacturing,
materials
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and materials
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 contribute less than 10% each. Concerning the second chart, which shows the
production
 per source for
year
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 2060, services and
energy
 maintain their positions
of
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 the largest contributors, even increasing by 1 and 2
percent
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 respectively. Info-com-tech and materials are the only other sources that managed to increase their
production
 amount.
In contrast
, other previously small categories have fallen even lower when compared to their 2040 levels with
energy
production
 levels decreasing by a few
percent
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 and agriculture plummeting by a factor of four.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • punitive measures
  • deterrence
  • driving offences
  • violating traffic laws
  • speeding
  • driving under the influence
  • stricter punishments
  • alternative measures
  • road infrastructure
  • vehicle safety features
  • public awareness campaigns
  • driving education programs
  • effectiveness of existing laws
  • consistent enforcement
  • comprehensive approach
  • automated traffic violation systems
  • ethical considerations
  • social inequality
  • disproportionately affect
  • fair treatment
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