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In some countries , owing a home rather than renting one is very important for people. why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negativbe situation

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Nowadays, many
people
 prefer to be a homeowner rather than a tenant. There are many reasons why
this
 is the case. Personally, in my opinion, there are both pros and cons
for
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this
 situation and I will explain my reasons in the following paragraphs.
To begin
 with, I think one of the most important reasons why
people
 choose to own a
house
 is that they don't need to
be worry
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 about moving to a new
house
 every year. Most tenants are getting annoyed by moving each year as it is too expensive.
Furthermore
, most
people
 prefer to spend
money
 on a mortgage
instead
 of
a
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rent. They believe that by spending
money
 on renting
home
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, they are wasting their wealth. I take my parents as an example. They bought a
house
 twenty years ago and now it has only remained five years more to pay off their mortgage and after they will own their
house
 for the rest of their life.
In addition
, some
people
 think that by being a homeowner you can show others the quality of your life and be a rich person in their views.
On the other hand
 , it is not very easy to own a
house
. You have to have enough
money
 for the down payment in order to buy a
house
. Not many
people
 can afford the expenses to become a homeowner, especially young adults who just got married.
As a result
, they ask their parents to help them financially and in some cases the parents don't want to reject their kids and will help them even if they are not capable and they will go under pressure.
To conclude
 , there are both advantages and disadvantages aspects of owning a
house
,
however
, I believe that it should be viewed as a positive aspect as you don't waste your
money
 by buying it.
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