Many people think that to become a successful speciailist it's better to choose a career early in life and never changer it later. To what extent do you agree with tis view. support your opinion with relevant examples.

Nowadays, many people believe that it is better to choose your
job
as early as possible and remain in the same field forever in order to become successful. In my viewpoint,
however
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it is good to know your purpose early in
life
, but
this
doesn'
t
guarantee your success. I will explain my reasons with relevant examples in the following paragraph. On the one hand, not everybody knows what they want from
life
when they are young and they can'
t
choose their permanent career early in
life
.
For instance
, my cousin didn'
t
know what was her favorite
job
and she went to a medical
school
after she graduated from high
school
.
However
, after a
while
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she found that medical
school
was not suitable for her and she made
decision
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to stop studying medicine. She was told by everybody that she was making a big mistake, but she couldn'
t
tolerate
university
as she thought the courses were so hard. After quitting
university
, she found a
job
in a kindergarten, but she found that she couldn'
t
progress that much as a daycare teacher and she went to a
university
at the age of 30 and started studying high
school
teaching. Now she is 40 years old and she is very successful in her field.
As a result
, the more you become older, the more you know your interests.
On the other hand
, it is not guaranteed to become successful if you choose your career early in
life
.
For example
, I know a friend who wanted to become an architect since she was a child. She was so smart and went to Harvard
university
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to study architecture.
However
, she was not successful after graduation and she went bankrupt after a
while
. As
it
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can be seen, it is not guaranteed to become successful if you know what you want to do early in
life
.
To conclude
, not everybody becomes prosperous in their
life
if they know their permanent
job
from an early age and they always have the right to change their career if they are not satisfied with it.
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