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Convenience foods will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional food and traditional ways of food preparation. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In the near future, Instant
foods
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 will be consumed more than authentic food and ways of preparing it.
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 might be because inactive lifestyle of
people
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.
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 I agree with
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 view to some extent ,
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, few communities still consider preparing and consuming traditional food
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 their cultural restrictions. On the one hand, Families where both partners are working were leaning towards the convenient
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 that could be made within a few minutes.
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 may be the reason for the increase in consumption of these
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 as
people
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 are running towards their careers and want to minimize their time spent preparing three meals a day.
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, some of these
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 are even considered to be healthy and are rich in protein and fibre which even doctors prescribe. Take Oats
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, At present 90% of the society consumes
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 as their breakfast since it saves time for preparation and is
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 considered to be healthy. Meanwhile, a decade ago
people
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 were not even aware of the existence of
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 food.
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, Still there are elderly
people
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 who are not yet convinced with these instant
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 as they are habitual of cooking three meals every day. Unequivocally, in some communities’ authentic
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 fall under their family heritage.
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, they are restricted from consuming certain types of
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.
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, few community
people
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 would prefer not to consume
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 as it is against their cultural values.
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,
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people
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 will tend not to eat instant
foods
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 as they would not know what type of ingredients are added to the meal.
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, Ultimately, I believe that because of the workaholic lifestyle,
people
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 increased their consumption of convenience
foods
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 replacing traditional ones and it is methodology. Despite some communities still following their principles and values.
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