The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The two tables show the data on the
temperature
,
precise
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and precise
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time of sunrise and sunset in
Londan
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London
and Sydney between 28th and 20th December
in
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2018.
Overall
,
duration
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the duration
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between sunrise and sunset was longer in Sydney than in
London
.
Thefore
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Therefore
, Sydney's
temperature
was significantly higher than
London
's. The
temperature
of
London
was around 4-9
degrees
on Friday,
however
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it fluctuated during the period
,
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and reached
maximum
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the maximum
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of 10
degrees
and
minimum
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a minimum
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of 5
degrees
on Sunday.
On the other hand
, Australia's
temperature
was
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consistently escalated, it started from 17-26
degrees
on Friday
,
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and reached a peak of
maximum
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a maximum
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of 31
degrees
and
minimum
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a minimum
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of 19
degrees
on Sunday. Sunrise and sunset time of
Londan
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London
and Australia were exactly shared, and both of them followed an upward trend during the period.
London
's sunrises were 08:05 and 08:06,
whereas
Australia's were 05:45 and 05:46 from Friday to Sunday.
Sunsets
of these cities had similar trends, and
London
's
sunsets
were before 4 p.m. but, Austalia's
sunsets
were after 8 p.m.. There was an approximately 4 hours difference between the
sunsets
of these cities.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words temperature, london, degrees, sunsets with synonyms.
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  • The tables compare
  • temperatures
  • hours of daylight
  • ranged from
  • consistently high
  • slight increase
  • remained stable
  • significantly fewer
  • enjoyed
  • overall
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