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In many societies, there is a growing emphasis on sustainable living and reducing environmental impact. What are the challenges of adopting a sustainable lifestyle? What practical actions can individuals take to contribute to sustainability?

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Nowadays, sustainable living remains a pressing issue all over the world. For many communities, a sustainable life is the best way to reduce environmental issues and their impact on health and the future.
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, there are several challenges faced by folk
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 adopting these goals
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 as no plastic uses etc. and the following paragraphs will expatiate both stances with lucid examples before framing some implementations by population. To commence with, the first and foremost point to adopting
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 kind of life is that,
nation
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 use these items on a regular basis which means it is hard for them to find some alternatives in the beginning.
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: in the
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 year, India has one of the main targets
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to reduce plastic waste to reduce environmental pollution, but it was next to impossible for the
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 as they are using them to carry things.
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, it is even harder for the government to complete their goals because individuals are not aware of these targets and their benefits
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 as Canada SDG's is no poverty, no hunger, and no discrimination by 2030.
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 an American survey, only 5% of
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public have knowledge of these things.
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 with the practical actions, the first significant implementation is to educate the nations about all policies before it begins.
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 means, they can not only try to learn some new alternatives
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 but
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 support
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 lifestyle. To illustrate my point, one gallon of water is wasted by each human every day before using any measures, but the wastage of water is reduced after having the awareness of these programs.
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, the government should make a few rules to follow the policies.
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, there should be serious punishments for not following these rules, which ultimately creates fear in the community.
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, there is no doubt that there are a few difficulties to follow
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 life
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 as finding alternatives for things, less use of water etc.
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, the government and the people
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can put their foot together to mitigate these difficulties
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 as providing
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information regarding all these plans, making rules by the international
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 national departments etc.

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coherence cohesion
The overall essay structure is fairly logical, yet there is room for improvement. The points made in the essay do not flow as cohesively as they could. Consider trying to connect your ideas more fluidly, using more complex sentence structures (compound and complex sentences) and linking words. This will help make your arguments and overall essay structure more coherent. Reading high-level sample essays can help improve this.
task achievement
The essay doesn't fully cover what the question asks. The response didn't quite answer the question fully and there were instances where the original topic, which was the challenges of adopting sustainable habits and the practical steps an individual can take, deviated. You delved into topics like public knowledge and punishments which weren't exactly relevant to the question. So focus on answering the question directly next time.
task achievement
You've given examples to support your points, which is good. However, these examples didn't add much depth to your argument, as they weren't really connected to the actual points you were trying to make. Try to add examples that directly relate to the point you're trying to make. These should be more specific, not general, and should be able to illustrate your point clearly.
lexical resource
Your vocabulary is varied and you had some complex constructions which is commendable. However, try to improve accuracy in using complex sentences and take care of grammatical mistakes. Ensure that your pronoun references are clear and that subject-verb agreement is observed throughout your writing.
grammatical range accuracy
You have a good range of grammar structures and tenses, such as simple and compound sentences and different verb forms. However, there are several instances where the syntax is slightly off or inappropriate tense's been used. Take care to proofread your writing to avoid these common errors. Formal English study, such as grammar exercises, could be beneficial for improving accuracy.

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