Nowadays there is a growing amount of advertising aimed at children. Some people think this has negative effects on children and should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In today's world, many promotional advertisements are targeted towards
teenagers
, which has a negative impact on them. Some people believe that these videos shouldn't be watched by children
. I completely agree that teenagers
should avoid these advertisements.
First,
most promotional videos focus primarily on the selling points of the product, ignoring the dark side that may have a negative impact on children
's development. For example
, there are some candies that sell organic ingredients, but they appropriately hide the fact that these candies contain high levels of sugar or sodium per piece. This
type of misleading message, commonly used in advertising, attracts teenagers
to consume unhealthy products that may affect their growth and health. Since teenagers
have not acquired enough knowledge to discern the truth, advertising for children
should be banned.
Secondly
, the technology used in advertising can create misconceptions among young people. Businessmen often combine their products with beautiful images and concepts to boost sales. For example
, toy companies combine their merchandise with materiality and high social status as attraction points to track customer purchasing sentiment. Since children
can easily see these promotional clips on television, they can learn through the associations in advertisements and easily build up misconceptions. This
can harm children
by altering the proper attitudes and methods that they have acquired in school.
In summary, advertising directed towards children
should be strictly regulated to avoid any misinterpretation of the message by children
. Parents also
play an important role as firewalls to ensure that their children
are protected from a wide range of harmful information.Submitted by y2083749065 on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
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- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite