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The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The tables compare weather conditions, which both citizens from
London
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 and
Sydney
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 have experienced, in terms of temperature level, and length of daylight at a weekend of the
last
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 month in 2018.
Overall
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,
while
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 Australians experienced steady in thermal, that was not the case for the British as they underwent fluctuating weather. Another thing to consider is the climate of
Sydney
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 was far higher compared to
London
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. Looking into the data for a more detailed view, in just 3 days, the weather in
London
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 varied noticeably, as they went from 4
degrees
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 minimum and 9
degrees
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 maximum in the 28th to 3
degrees
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 minimum and 13
degrees
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 maximum in the 29th, which is doubled in their temperature gap from 5 to 10 in just 2 days.
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 despite the growth in
Sydney
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's climate, which is still more stable than in
London
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, the gap between the most and least recorded temperature did not change over 3 consecutive days. On top of that, citizens can experience daytime longer in
Sydney
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 than in
London
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, as the timespan for the sun appearing is much longer nearly 7 more hours.
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 the sun rises earlier and sets later than in the land of the queen, which is about 5am to 20pm in
Sydney
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, whilst 8am to 16pm in
London
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Vocabulary: Replace the words london, sydney, degrees with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • The tables compare
  • temperatures
  • hours of daylight
  • ranged from
  • consistently high
  • slight increase
  • remained stable
  • significantly fewer
  • enjoyed
  • overall
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