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Academic achievements at school or university is the only true measure of a person’s intelligence. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#achievements #school #university #measure #person’s #intelligence
A person usually
spent
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 their study time at
school
 or
university
, it can be the reason why there is a statement that says the only measurement of someone's intelligence is their achievements at
school
 or
university
, especially in
academic
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academics
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. But
that is
 not true and will be discussed
further
 as follows.
Firstly
, there are not many people that
blessed
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are blessed
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 with decent
school
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schools
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 and some even can not attend
university
. In that terms, many people can not do very well with their
study
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studies
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, even
thought
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though
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 they do have many other values that
not
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are not
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 in line with
school
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the school
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 curriculum.
For instance
, one basketball player
that
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apply
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got kicked
from
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out of
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 his
highschool
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high school
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 because he
can
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could
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 not
catching
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catch
be catching
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 up with the
expectation
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expectations
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 of his
school
, but ended up being a
successfull
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successful
 basketball player.
Nevertheles
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Nevertheless
, a lot of people spent their
live
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 in
school
, like when they started kindergarten until they
go
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went
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for
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to
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 college, there
were
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was
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 almost no gap in between. But again,
school
 is not their
live
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life
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. Some
school
forced
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force
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 their student to study what they think is good, but do not really care if the students are comfortable
of
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or
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 not with that, that leave the
childrens
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children
children's
 confused and turns out
having
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to have
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a
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apply
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bad grades.
For example
, there is a movie that tells a story about a stupid kid
that
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who
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 always
get
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gets
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 0 for his test, until he
met
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meets
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 a great teacher
that
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who
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understand
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understands
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 him and can
made
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make
be made
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 him into a math championship. In conclusion, measuring someone's intelligence based on their academic achievement at
school
 or
university
,
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apply
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 is not a great thing to do since not everyone
put
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puts
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 all of their lives at
school
 or
university
.
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