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Write about the following topic: Studying with a group of students in a classroom is more beneficial than learning online at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task

#topic #group #students #classroom #home #minutes
it is said that there were significant advantages
for
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 studying
face to face
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face-to-face
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 with a group of pupils in a classroom over
online
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the online
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 method. Personally, I could not agree more with
this
 view, the purpose of
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will
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 explain my prompt of agreement.
To begin
 with,
focus
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the focus
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 would be out of the window for
online
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the online
an online
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student
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students
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. It would not be
surprised
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 when surrounding factors
such
 as
from
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apply
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you
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apply
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relatives,
noises
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and noises
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will
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apply
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distract learners from studying. Not only that, there was
noticeable
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 surge
of
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in
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learning
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a learning
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 curve for the worse compared to learning
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in at
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at
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a
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 physical interactive classroom, which
forces
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 many
school
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 to lower the difficulty of exams
while
 in covid time, when studying
via
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online was a must.
On the other hand
,
student
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students
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 would find it more academic and professional than online
platform
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platforms
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.
Moreover
, they will learn from each other as mistakes would be easier found among students
as well as
 building confidence to ask their question about something that they do not quite get a grasp of. Knowledge is not the only
things
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thing
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 that
student
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students
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 need but
also
 soft
skill
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skills
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such
 as confidence, body language, communication,
interpersonal
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and interpersonal
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 skills.
Hence
, physical classrooms
are giving
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those
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apply
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opportunities for learners to learn. In
the
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 nutshell,
it
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apply
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would
be
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 far more disadvantages for those online learners compared to groups of students in classrooms. Not only they will find it more difficult to focus, but
also
 they will
experienced
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 some delay in their learning curve
as well as
missing
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miss
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 opportunities to learn experience or improve their soft skills
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