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The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000-2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000-2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the amount of money which has been earned by three given
bakery
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 houses, namely,
Amandine
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Bakery
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,
Mari
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Bakeshop
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 and
Bolo
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 Cakery in Calgary between 2000 and 2010.
Overall
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, it is noticeable that the
income
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 in
Amandine
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Bakery
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 and
Bolo
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 Cakery increased significantly,
whereas
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 in
Mari
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Bakeshop
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 it has declined substantially by the end of the observed period.
Initially
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, the annual earnings of
Bolo
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 Cakery accounted for 20,000
dollars
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, which was a quarter of the yearly
income
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 of
Mari
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Bakeshop
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 during the same year. From 2000 to 2005, a figure which indicated the amount of money which was earned per year by
Amandine
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Bakery
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 plateaued at approximately 55,000
dollars
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,
however
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 between 2005 and 2006 the trends which demonstrate the annual
income
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 of
Amandine
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Bakery
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 and
Mari
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Bakeshop
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 equalized and their profit made up just under 60,000
dollars
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.
In addition
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, since 2006 the data which gives information about the annual earnings of
Mari
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Bakeshop
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 has been decreasing considerably and by the end of the given ,timeline the amount of money earned per year constituted half of the yearly
income
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 of the same
bakery
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 in 2000. Between 2007 and 2008, the lines which show the annual profit of
Bolo
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Bakery
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 and
Mari
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Bakeshop
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 overlapped and their yearly
income
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 made up about 50,000
dollars
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, which was more than twice as much as the yearly earnings of the
Bolo
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Bakery
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 at the beginning of the given timeline.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bakery, amandine, mari, bakeshop, bolo, income, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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