Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own option.

The extinction of certain floras and faunas is widely considered
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the
most
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environmental
issues
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nowadays,
whereas
others
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assume that there are even more existing critical issues. In my point of view, it is certainly true that losing certain creatures
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impacted natural imbalances. On the one hand, there is no doubt that the most natural disaster faced by humanity is
air
pollution. It is evident that the
air
inhaled has been contaminated with Carbon emissions from massive vehicles affecting chronic
disease
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such
as lung cancer. Recent studies,
however
, have found that there are several
sollutions
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solutions
to reduce pollution in
air
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by diminishing
vehicles
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usage and converting from gas-powered to electric vehicles.
As a result
, the number of carbon emissions in
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reduce
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significantly.
On the other hand
, losing certain species of floras and faunas is an obvious environmental problem
due to
the fact that it will distort ecological balance. When natural balance is distorted, it will affect
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multiple food chains.
For instance
, if
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predator
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predators
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such
as
lion
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lions
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and
tiger
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extinct, the species that
used
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to prey
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the predator
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reproduce significantly, meanwhile, if producer
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organisms
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such
as grass stop growing, herbivore animal will
loss
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their food.
This
also
can be concluded that
human
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will face
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crisis if certain creatures
are perished
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. By way of conclusion,
Although
there are myriad environmental issues that humanity
face
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nowadays, I’m still convinced that the extinction of certain creatures will be a catastrophic natural disaster. The government plays an important role by enforcing environmental laws to remedy
this problems
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  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • deforestation
  • habitat destruction
  • climate change
  • pollution
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