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It is important for all towns and cities to have large public outdoor places like squares and parks. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#towns #cities #places #squares #parks
I am strongly showing my interest in the BA (Hons)
Business
Management
 (1 Year top-up) course at the University of Middlesex University because I think
this
 course will not only boost my career but
also
 increase my existing skills to reach a new level. The motivation of my learning abilities inspired me to study
this
 program and it will enhance my knowledge.
Moreover
, there are various reasons behind for choosing
this
 course I think
Business
Management
 is the study of sales, marketing, operations and strategic
management
 which is very useful for me.
Furthermore
, I have been participating in the
business
 events in my school competition.
This
 has developed my ability more curiosity about
Business
Management
 which will ensure that I actively participate in future activities. Moving to the diploma in computer engineering had a twist and turn for me. During my professional journey, I have learned some new skills
such
 as problem-solving, critical thinking, creativity, organization,
management
, leadership, teamwork and many more. As per my belief, with the help of these types of skills, we can create something that can extra-ordinary improve the quality of life & and growth of our career. I personally enrolled with
this
 university for better progress and to learn something unique.
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