The charts below show each grade level’s activity and the total revenue gained from it, by percentage, from King Primary School’s recent fundraising event. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show each grade level’s activity and the total revenue gained from it, by percentage, from King Primary School’s recent fundraising event. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the fundraising activity conducted by each
grade
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and the pie chart denotes the percentage of
money
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raised by each
grade
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respectively.
Overall
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, most
money
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was raised by
grade
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1 and the least was raised by
grade
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3. The highest contributor of 23.7% to the total profit made from the event came from
Grade
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1 by conducting a dance
contest
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.
This
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figure was closely followed by 2nd
grade
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by
conducting
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conducted
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a cake decorating
contest
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.
Grade
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5 came 3rd by contributing 18.3%
revenue
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of revenue
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from organising a cookie sale.
Grade
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6, by conducting a
contest
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for soccer
skill
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skills
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, took 4th place with
roughtly
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roughly
a 3% difference in the
money
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raised when compared to
grade
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5.
Furthermore
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,the art sale conducted by
Grade
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4 contributed to 13.9% of the profits.
Finally
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, the book sale organised by
3rd
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the 3rd
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grade
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only contributed to 7.8% of the total
money
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raised, which puts it in the
last
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position.
To conclude
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, the dance
contest
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was a huge success and
conversely
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, the soccer skill
contest
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was a
failiure
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failure
compared to other events.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words grade, money, contest with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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