The bar chart below shows the hours per week that teenagers spend doing certain activities in Chester from 2002 to 2007
The bar chart compares
allocated
time for various activities Correct article usage
the allocated
during
per week by teenagers between 2002 and 2007. Change preposition
apply
Overall
, however
some activities' spent Add a comma
,however
hours
increased, watching television had higher spent time during whole
Add an article
the whole
period
.
First of all, the hours
that related going
to pubs\discos and shopping increased throughout the Change preposition
to going
period
. However
, teenagers spent less than 10 hours
for
going to pubs in 2002, Change preposition
apply
this
number increased to almost 20 in 2007. Similarly
, it was the same for shopping, and it rose from closely
Change the word
close
5
to 15 Change preposition
to 5
hours
. Secondly
, doing homework was a downward trend, and it declined from approximately 13 to around 6 hours
per week from 2002 to 2007. In addition
,during whole
Add an article
the whole
period
, bowling was the most unpopular activity,and teenagers spent less than 5 hours
per week.
Regardless, all
other actions' allocated time less than 25, watching television was always higher than Change preposition
of all
this
and increased throughout the period
.In fact, this
activity's most spent hours
was almost 37 hours
in 2007.Submitted by askerovhamid06 on
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