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Computers are more and more important in educational aspects. Some people say that this is a good trend, while others argue that it bad. Discuss both sides of this argument and then give your own opinion.

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In the present age, whether
computers
 are necessary or indeed in education has sparked much debate. Some people assert that
computers
 are vital in learning,
whereas
 many others argue that
computers
 are negative in education. In
this
 essay, both sides will be explored, followed by the opinion.
On the other hand
, people think that seems to have many causes.
Firstly
, On the one hand, other people tend to believe that they have different reasons. First of all, In conclusion, I have conceded that
computers
 have more advantages like supporting their students' skills and to easy to learn. Despite that,
computers
 are not good in schools which have few benefits.
Overall
, I am convinced that in any learning ,place there are many different technologies.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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