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Children are facing more pressures nowadays from academic social and commercial perspectives. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures?

#children #pressures #perspectives #measures
In today's society,
children
 are experiencing a lot of
stresses
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stress
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of
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 academic, social and commercial ways.
This
 essay intends to discuss the causes of
this
 problem and suggest some measures to alleviate these pressures.
This
 problem
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 several causes.First of all, today's
children
 are not competing with each other through their knowledge in school or competitions .
However
,their
parents
 want
to
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that
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their
children
 must be
a
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good
at
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 every field.So their
parents
 send their
children
 to the good schools.And their school
baggs
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bags
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 will be very heavier than the
child
 himself.After school hours , there are some tuitions to study for every
child
.
This
 is
an
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 academic pressure of
this
 situation.
Moreover
, there are more social and commercial conditions amongst the
children
.
For example
 , in many cases,
children
 see the latest modern
of
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telephones, computers and
another things
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on
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 the hands of friends.After that, they may want to buy
these kind
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 of
thing
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things
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 for themselves.But they may have not
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the scopes
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scopes
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scope
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 to do so.
And which
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 in turn
is
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this
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will be the root of
get
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stress. There are
also
 many solutions to reduce these pressures .It is more correct to say that many duties
is
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 on
parents
.Because of
this
, every
parents
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parent
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 should divide the time
to
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for
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 their
children
 to study.If
the
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people
to
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do so,
child's
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the child's
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duty
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duties
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 decrease a little
bitt
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bit
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.
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Otherwise
,
also
 teachers and schools must
approch
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approach
 more to
children
.
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more.
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The teachers have to teach pupils
with
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interesting things and so
also
 they have to give
times
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time
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 to demonstrate their hidden talents
Children
 may not have any academic pressure.
To conclude
,it ,it is reiterated every
child
 is
exposuring
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exposing
 more pressures
such
 as academic, social and commercial.I would say that if
above
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 steps are taken, all of
that
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those
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 problems would
solve
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.
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  • academic pressure
  • globalized world
  • competitive education system
  • social media influences
  • cyberbullying
  • commercial pressures
  • aggressive marketing
  • materialistic desires
  • peer pressure
  • high expectations
  • standardized testing
  • quantifiable performance
  • stress and anxiety
  • extracurricular achievements
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