Young drivers are careless & overconfident, and too many are killed in accidents. To eliminate this problem, we could teach children the skills of safe driving while they are at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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very overconfident and careless, they
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the problem when they face trouble in the way.
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how to drive
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but teach less skill of safe driving. So in my opinion,
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can teach them how to
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high. Many parents
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more busy
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their work and neglect their children. They press for the time with their child, they cannot bring
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to school so they buy
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their child a kind of transport in order to move everywhere. It is
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scenario, they have just
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how to drive and
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neglect
how to safe driving because it
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time and they can concentrate on their work. The kid who
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driving
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self-sufficient. They use means of
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young for
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very better than other children. they
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show off they can
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to everyone but
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lack important skills
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safe driving. We must teach it to them and we can bring it
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the curriculum.I think it very essential and
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useful
. we can minimize the accident
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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