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The three charts below show the value in Australian dollars of Australian trade with three different countries from 2004 to 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The three charts below show the value in Australian dollars of Australian trade with three different countries from 2004 to 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
The line graphs depict information about the
value
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 of Australian money,
trade
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and trade
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 with three nations namely
Chijna
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China
,
Japan
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 and
United
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the United
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states
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States
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 during the year between 2004and 2009.The data
measured
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is measured
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 in the form of billions.
Overall
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,
trade
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in trade
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 with China, the monetary
value
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 was increased,
while
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 the deals with
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the united
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united states
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United States
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maintained
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were
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constantly
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constant
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 and
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Japan
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Japan's
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 commerce activities declined the currency
value
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 of the nation. Looking at the graph in detail,
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Australia
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Australia's
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 commerce activities with China, in 2004, around 10
billion
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 dollars
earned
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were earned
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 through exports, but imports
eraned
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earned
the
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apply
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double
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doubled
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 the
value
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 of exports and that accounted
to
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for
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 20
billion
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.
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, during the period from 2005 to 2008, there was a significant increase in exporting and importing.During the final
year
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,year
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Australia
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 earned higher income through exporting and that accounted for 30
billion
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 dollars.
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,
Australia
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 deals with
Japan
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, in 2004, the earning of import and export stood at 20
billion
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 in 2004.
Subsequently
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, the export was slightly upward
the
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in the
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 following years and it
was
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reached
the
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a
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peakpoint
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peak point
breakpoint
in2008
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in 2008
and
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apply
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it was just below
the
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apply
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40
billion
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 dollars.
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Australia
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Australia's
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impotrs
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imports
 goods from
Japan
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 remained
same
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the same
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 and that accounted for 20
billion
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.
However
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,
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australia
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australia's
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 trade with America earned
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a costant
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costant
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constant
 amount of income through exporting and importing.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words value, japan, australia, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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