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The three charts below show the value in Australian dollars of Australian trade with three different countries from 2004 to 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below. You should write at least 150 words.

The three charts below show the value in Australian dollars of Australian trade with three different countries from 2004 to 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below. You should write at least 150 words.
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The line graphs depict information about the
value
 of Australian money,
trade
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and trade
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 with three nations namely
Chijna
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China
,
Japan
 and
United
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the United
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states
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States
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 during the year between 2004and 2009.The data
measured
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is measured
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 in the form of billions.
Overall
,
trade
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in trade
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 with China, the monetary
value
 was increased,
while
 the deals with
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the united
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united states
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United States
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maintained
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were
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constantly
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constant
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 and
Japan
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Japan's
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 commerce activities declined the currency
value
 of the nation. Looking at the graph in detail,
Australia
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Australia's
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 commerce activities with China, in 2004, around 10
billion
 dollars
earned
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were earned
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 through exports, but imports
eraned
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earned
the
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apply
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double
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doubled
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 the
value
 of exports and that accounted
to
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for
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 20
billion
.
Moreover
, during the period from 2005 to 2008, there was a significant increase in exporting and importing.During the final
year
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,year
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Australia
 earned higher income through exporting and that accounted for 30
billion
 dollars.
Furthermore
,
Australia
 deals with
Japan
, in 2004, the earning of import and export stood at 20
billion
 in 2004.
Subsequently
, the export was slightly upward
the
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in the
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 following years and it
was
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apply
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reached
the
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a
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peakpoint
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peak point
breakpoint
in2008
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in 2008
and
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apply
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it was just below
the
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apply
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40
billion
 dollars.
Australia
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Australia's
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impotrs
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imports
 goods from
Japan
 remained
same
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the same
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 and that accounted for 20
billion
.
However
,
australia
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australia's
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 trade with America earned
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a costant
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costant
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constant
 amount of income through exporting and importing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words value, japan, australia, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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