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The chart below shows the number of Internet users in three different countries and the world average between 1998 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of Internet users in three different countries and the world average between 1998 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar
chat
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chart
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 illustrates the
quantity
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number
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 of telephone calls in the UK,
categories
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 into three
group
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groups
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 over a period
7
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of 7
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years between 1995 and 2002
Overall
, I can
be seen
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 from the graph that the total
number
 of minutes of local fixed
line
 had been the highest
while
 mobiles had been the lowest. National and international - fixed
line
 at
average
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an average
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 level The total
number
 of minutes local -
fixed
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the fixed
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line
 was about 71
billions
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billion
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 in 1995 and the highest in 1999 reached 90
billions
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billion
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 but
this
number
 decreased continuously from 2000 to 2002
about
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 15 billion The total
number
 of national and international - fixed
line
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lines
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 has always maintained a steady increase from 35 to 60 billion in 7 years.
As well as
,
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apply
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 the figure for mobiles
it
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apply
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has always climbed within 7 years
about
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by about
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 40
billions
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billion
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, line with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Internet penetration
  • Trend
  • Growth rate
  • Increase/decrease
  • Comparative analysis
  • Significant
  • Average
  • Fluctuation
  • Plateau
  • Surge
  • Spike
  • Decline
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