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Friendships that take place online are not as meaningful as those where people meet each other face to face. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Progress in
internet
 communication is changing our social style significantly and how we keep in touch with friends and family. Today, some
people
 argue that the
Internet
 is convenient but less valuable than face-to-face conversations. I agree with
this
 statement. On the one hand, relationships are something that cannot be replaced by online communications, the feeling, the tone, and the expressions are something that cannot be copied from the
internet
 conversation. Especially human beings are extremely sensitive creatures, we cannot survive alone and always desire the company of friends and family.
For instance
,
people
 who have face-to-face conversations with friends give
people
 a stress relief method, that can help
people
 reduce the sense of stress and pressure. These indicate that having interaction can generate some positive effects.
On the other hand
, the
internet
 occupies a large proportion of modern society, which means that face-to-face communication is no longer the common way for
people
 to keep in touch with others.
Also
, the
internet
 can create tons of problems and causes misunderstanding.
For example
, one of the studies about friendship relationships from the British Broadcasting Corporation (BBC), showed that
people
 are more likely to feel emotion and voice rather than send
the
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text on the
internet
,
instead
 of the text or emoji, which can
also
 easily create a wrong image;
however
, over 67%
people
 agree that it is more easily to maintain their friendships by face-to-face communicate.
As a result
, it proved that real-life interaction is irreplaceable. In summary, the
internet
 has a huge impact on our daily
life
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 and has changed the way we meet with
people
.
However
, maintaining friendships will not be changed by those advanced technologies because it is more important to feel the emotions and interactions in our
life
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  • depth of understanding
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  • shared interests
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