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In some countries, companies allow people to work from home. In others, people are still expected to work in an office. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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 suppose that reading
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 should be a positive pastime all the time, it is thought by others that choosing
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 is necessary for a human. Reading can always be positive since it can help develop
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 outlook but the content of
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 must be more vital whether to read or not. On the one hand,
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 can be packed with different
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ideas and opinions which are helpful for
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 individual to communicate with others, it would shape
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 as ones who are able to express their viewpoints freely.
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 means that
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 individual will be seen as a competently knowledgeable one in front of big audiences
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 room.
On the other hand
, we must be wary of
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while
 we are opting. If the content that we are reading has negative insights,
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 individual loses their time right pathway in life, meaning those
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 can even lead to committing crimes. In accordance with
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 having various tastes in reading, I would argue that the topic
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 discussing have to be completely appropriate and relevant to one's interest, age
as well as
 personal life.
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 habit is employed as a motivator
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 those who have a strong aspiration to read. In conclusion,
according to
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 must take advantage of
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 as a habit but others feel that
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 have to be chosen appropriately. In my opinion, reading can not be a useful habit for all.
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