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The graph below compares SAT math results according to gender from 1992 to 2000 in a particular school. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below compares SAT math results according to gender from 1992 to 2000 in a particular school. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart gives information about the average SAT
math
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scores
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 categorised by gender between 1992 and 2000 in a particular school.
Overall
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, both girls' and boy's SAT
math
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scores
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 had a
significantly
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 rise over the eight-year
period
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.
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,
average
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the average
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 SAT
math
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 results of male
students
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being
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higher than those of female
students
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 during the time from 1992 to 2000. Boys' average SAT
math
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scores
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 started at 500
points
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 in 1992 and rose moderately by 10
points
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 in the next year
,
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 before it had a marginal decline to about 505
points
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 in 1994. After that, the
period
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 time from 1994 to 1998 witnessed a steady climb to about 530
points
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 in the end. A
period
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 of erratic behavior at about 530
points
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 was
saw
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seen
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 in male
students
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' average SAT
math
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results
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results in
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 the
last
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 2 years until 2000. The
period
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 of time from 1992 to 2000 saw a dramatic increase of about 70
points
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of
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in
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 female
students
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' SAT
math
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scores
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. In the year 1992, the figure
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for
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of
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for
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female
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the female
a female
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points
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point
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points
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 was only 460
points
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 which moderately rose by over 30
points
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 in the next three years. After that, there was a surge to more than 490
points
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 in girls' average SAT results in 1996 which made the distance between average SAT
math
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points
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 of male and
females
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students
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 just about 10
points
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. The
scores
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 of girls' average SAT
math
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 experienced a modest drop by 20
points
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 over
that
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the
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last
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 four years of the
period
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 and peaked
510
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at 510
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points
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 in the year 2000.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words math, scores, period, students, points with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moderately" was used 2 times.
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