The graph below compares SAT math results according to gender from 1992 to 2000 in a particular school. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart gives information about the average SAT
math
scores
categorised by gender between 1992 and 2000 in a particular school. Overall
, both girls' and boy's SAT math
scores
had a significantly
rise over the eight-year Change the word
significant
period
. In addition
, average
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the average
math
results of male students
were being
higher than those of female Unnecessary verb
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students
during the time from 1992 to 2000.
Boys' average SAT math
scores
started at 500 points
in 1992 and rose moderately by 10 points
in the next year,
before it had a marginal decline to about 505 Remove the comma
apply
points
in 1994. After that, the period
time from 1994 to 1998 witnessed a steady climb to about 530 points
in the end. A period
of erratic behavior at about 530 points
was saw
in male Replace the word
seen
students
' average SAT math
results
the Add the preposition
results in
results from
last
2 years until 2000.
The period
of time from 1992 to 2000 saw a dramatic increase of about 70 points
of
female Change preposition
in
students
' SAT math
scores
. In the year 1992, the figure Change preposition
for
of
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for
female
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the female
a female
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points
point
was only 460 Fix the agreement mistake
points
points
which moderately rose by over 30 points
in the next three years. After that, there was a surge to more than 490 points
in girls' average SAT results in 1996 which made the distance between average SAT math
points
of male and females
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female
students
just about 10 points
. The scores
of girls' average SAT math
experienced a modest drop by 20 points
over that
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the
last
four years of the period
and peaked 510
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at 510
points
in the year 2000.Submitted by Thanh
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