The graph below compares SAT math results according to gender from 1992 to 2000 in a particular school. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below compares SAT math results according to gender from 1992 to 2000 in a particular school. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart gives information about the average SAT
math
scores
categorised by gender between 1992 and 2000 in a particular school.
Overall
, both girls' and boy's SAT
math
scores
had a
significantly
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rise over the eight-year
period
.
In addition
,
average
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SAT
math
results of male
students
were
being
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higher than those of female
students
during the time from 1992 to 2000. Boys' average SAT
math
scores
started at 500
points
in 1992 and rose moderately by 10
points
in the next year
,
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before it had a marginal decline to about 505
points
in 1994. After that, the
period
time from 1994 to 1998 witnessed a steady climb to about 530
points
in the end. A
period
of erratic behavior at about 530
points
was
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in male
students
' average SAT
math
results
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the
last
2 years until 2000. The
period
of time from 1992 to 2000 saw a dramatic increase of about 70
points
of
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female
students
' SAT
math
scores
. In the year 1992, the figure
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of
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female
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points
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point
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was only 460
points
which moderately rose by over 30
points
in the next three years. After that, there was a surge to more than 490
points
in girls' average SAT results in 1996 which made the distance between average SAT
math
points
of male and
females
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students
just about 10
points
. The
scores
of girls' average SAT
math
experienced a modest drop by 20
points
over
that
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last
four years of the
period
and peaked
510
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points
in the year 2000.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words math, scores, period, students, points with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "moderately" was used 2 times.
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