It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not.

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better than others in some positions is always interesting for people. Some people think it depends on our intelligence and some else think it is the result of our experiences and all
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people can achieve that performance. As a neuroscientist, I absolutely agree with the second opinion because there is more evidence for its correctness. First of all, I should say that we have some person with high intelligence in some works and we can't ignore it.
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of our
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which is really scarce. But the point is that the shape of our
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of
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which can facilitate the process of learning.
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,
this
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point is, we know that all our decisions depend on
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brain
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. So, we have a mass of
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in our head which are trained by analyzing input data from our ears, eyes and taste receptors.
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this
theory, we all have the ability to do similar things; So, why
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differences occur between someone like Garry Kasparov and a person who
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intermediate level
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, the things that we have
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in past are the cause of all these differences. these experiences have been
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recorded in every moment of our
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by our
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learns the way of acting in various positions. So, we can play a
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Kasparov if we were in the same situation as him. In summary, all our abilities and decisions depend on
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of
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which can be tuned for better performance by getting more
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practicing.
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we do not violate acquired intelligence, we consider it only a facilitating phenomenon So, there is no disability in a normal person against with talented one. they can achieve
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their goals but maybe with different energy consumption
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